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TITLE: Loving Leigh (4667)
AUTHOR: Kaye Ysabelle
FROM: Precious Hearts Romances
PAGES: 128
“Huwag mong masyadong ilapit sa akin ang mga labi mo. Marupok pa naman ako.”
Na-love at first sight si Georgina kay Doc Leigh, isang resident doctor sa ospital kung saan siya nagte-train sa orthopedic department. Pero sadyang aloof ito kaya ginawa niya ang lahat upang mapansin siya nito. Nagbunga naman ang mga pagsusumikap niya. Iyon nga lang, kinailangang umalis ni Doc Leigh para magpunta sa ibang bansa. Sinabi niya ritong handa siyang maghintay para dito.
Tinupad niya ang pangako niya. Lumipas ang tatlong taon, bumalik si Doc Leigh. Pero hindi ito nag-iisa. May kasama na itong isang magandang dalaga na balita ay… nobya raw nito.
REVIEW
GENRE
Romance
PLOT
I find the plot weak and mostly boring. Maybe due to the setting? The medical profession can be boring. I don't want my chapters and scenes to always start in the operating room or in hospital hallways—though a morgue would be nice for comic relief. I'd rather WATCH Grey's Anatomy than READ it.
POINT OF VIEW
I only liked the hero's POV. In fact, if he made a diary out of this story, I would be a little happy.
CHARACTERS
GEORGINA
I wouldn't want her to be my doctor. I mean, I know doctors have faults and quirks, but my impression of her, by the way she talked and moved, was that she was a dense and immature girl. She might be an excellent medical student, but her character was not that deep. Nothing special in the emotional level that I can connect with.
LEIGHGEORGINA
I wouldn't want her to be my doctor. I mean, I know doctors have faults and quirks, but my impression of her, by the way she talked and moved, was that she was a dense and immature girl. She might be an excellent medical student, but her character was not that deep. Nothing special in the emotional level that I can connect with.
If I was Doc Leigh, I would have ran as far away from Georgina as possible. I'm sure he'd find her weird. And Doc Leigh was an interesting character, though his roots, his motivations, were not given proper highlights.
Their FIRST meeting was disappointing because it felt superficial. Or the heroine was superficial. The descriptions were over the top and the heroine overreacted. It's really hard to connect with her. She's too tactless and unsophisticated.
OTHER DETAILS
Wow. Heroine with superhuman pain tolerance. Nangingitim na nga ang injury, na hindi ko malaman kung saan nagmula, pero kiber pa rin. It's unbelievable.Sarcasm is a waste of time. Especially when the heroine's just conversing with a minor character. Parang walang napatutunguhan `yong mga usapan nila. Supalpalan na lang ng supalpalan. And it also happened between the main characters' conversations. It was hard to grab the emotions and immerse myself in the scenes.
The scenes were not arranged well. There was one that could've had more impact if placed at the beginning of chapter one: The heroine's chance meeting with the hero's mom.
The transition from light-hearted story to drama threw me off-balance. Mayroon naman palang puwedeng paghugutan ng motivations ng characters, why was it not used?
Okay, so love exceeds rational thought. We all know that. But it wouldn't hurt to show the readers how it will bloom and develop into something stronger, something that's not only the result of the heroine's stubbornness. She can't just claim that she's in love and then squeeze herself into the hero's life. At guwapo lang, na-in love na? Hanggang sa huli, lamang pa rin ang physical admiration. Is that all? Mababaw.
It didn't matter that the descriptions felt refreshing and impressive because of the medical terms used, to poetically describe the rapid beating of the character's heart, for example. The depth and meaning of true love was not captured.
Distracting side-characters.
Was injury the only way to get close to the hero-doctor?
There was one scene that I think was sweet and could have been used to make the story better: the allergy-to-flowers scene in the latter part. I felt the energy there. It contained some of the bitter-sweet characteristics of true love.
Another positive point was how the story tried to express that doctors also have everyday-life worries. But the scenes were always bordering on boredom, especially if the reader's not into the medical surroundings. It could have been presented more normally, more for general consumption.
CONCLUSION
What is love according to your characters? How do they feel about its pleasures and sufferings? How will your characters face love when they find it? Will they accept it or run away from it? Every character has a story to tell—a bad past, a longing, a secret... What's your character's story? Don't just mention them in passing. Incorporate them in the story. Use them to explore possible conflicts and more interesting scenes. Make the readers fall in, out, and in love ten times over.
What is love according to your characters? How do they feel about its pleasures and sufferings? How will your characters face love when they find it? Will they accept it or run away from it? Every character has a story to tell—a bad past, a longing, a secret... What's your character's story? Don't just mention them in passing. Incorporate them in the story. Use them to explore possible conflicts and more interesting scenes. Make the readers fall in, out, and in love ten times over.
RATING: 1 STAR ★ ☆ ☆ ☆ ☆
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