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TITLE: Oplan: Bawiin Ang Puso Ni Jarome (4852)
AUTHOR: Stephany
FROM: Precious Hearts Romances
PAGES: 128
“Kung hindi kita nakilala, then my life would be totally different. Hindi ako magiging ganito kasaya.”
Mahal ni Ericka si Jarome pero hindi pa siya handang makipagrelasyon dito sa kabila ng pag-amin nitong mahal din siya nito. Nais muna niyang tuparin ang pangarap niya kaya mas pinili niyang umalis ng bansa kaysa manatili sa tabi nito. Nagkasundo silang pagbalik niya ay pag-uusapan nila ang tungkol sa kanilang dalawa.
Siya ang unang hindi tumupad sa pangako dahil ang isang buwan ay inabot nang apat na taon. Sa pagbalik niya sa bansa ay handa na siyang tanggapin si Jarome sa buhay niya. Pero nalaman niyang ikakasal na pala si Jarome at sa best friend pa niya.
Handa siyang gawin ang lahat upang bawiin si Jarome dahil una itong naging kanya. Pero mukhang huli na talaga siya. Dahil nalaman niyang ipinagbubuntis ng best friend niya ang anak ni Jarome.
REVIEW
GENRE
Romance
PLOT
The plot was fine at first. Simple, pero may pinatutunguhan. But things got confusing in the latter part.
POINT OF VIEW
The POVs were not put into good use.
CHARACTERS
ERICKA
She had depth somewhere, but it only came out with her conversation with other characters. With Jarome, she felt too clingy and dense. Everything almost went smoothly for her. Also, there's a difference between being clueless and being stupid. Having feelings for Jarome, there was no way she wouldn't put malice on his requests and advantages. She felt fake and stuck in a daydream.
JAROME
Not much character in here. May dating naman siya, but he missed the hero's romantic appeal. He failed to elevate himself in the hero status, and I blamed the author for it.
OTHER DETAILS
The feelings were not explored properly. It made the characters look stupid. In their actions, it was obvious that they had feelings for each other, but the author chose to make the characters ignore those things. It didn't work out well. It became dragging to read.
The characters felt dull. The connection was weak. Not much conflict or hurdles on their path. The motivation, the reason why the heroine was holding back her feelings, was weak.
The scenes were mundane, aside from when they went in the province. I saw a potential in there.
The main problem, when it came, made me think: Did the hero really had feelings for the heroine? As far as I know, in romance, the moment the hero and heroine meet, the hero should NOT be involved with another woman WILLINGLY. He's mostly trapped into those situations and it should be by a CONVINCING reason.
The feelings were not explored properly. It made the characters look stupid. In their actions, it was obvious that they had feelings for each other, but the author chose to make the characters ignore those things. It didn't work out well. It became dragging to read.
The characters felt dull. The connection was weak. Not much conflict or hurdles on their path. The motivation, the reason why the heroine was holding back her feelings, was weak.
The scenes were mundane, aside from when they went in the province. I saw a potential in there.
The main problem, when it came, made me think: Did the hero really had feelings for the heroine? As far as I know, in romance, the moment the hero and heroine meet, the hero should NOT be involved with another woman WILLINGLY. He's mostly trapped into those situations and it should be by a CONVINCING reason.
CONCLUSION
As I've mentioned before, incorporate your antagonists in the story. They can't just pop out conveniently when the time comes to separate the lovers. Give your "kontrabidas" motivations, too. Why they're wrecking havoc, etc. Goody-goody antagonists aren't effective. It will turn the heroine bad. And again, the hero is only for the heroine. Whatever thing he had for another woman should be thoroughly erased before the lovers get back together, to the point that the readers won't feel any threat on the couple's relationship.
As I've mentioned before, incorporate your antagonists in the story. They can't just pop out conveniently when the time comes to separate the lovers. Give your "kontrabidas" motivations, too. Why they're wrecking havoc, etc. Goody-goody antagonists aren't effective. It will turn the heroine bad. And again, the hero is only for the heroine. Whatever thing he had for another woman should be thoroughly erased before the lovers get back together, to the point that the readers won't feel any threat on the couple's relationship.
RATING: 1 STAR ★ ☆ ☆ ☆ ☆
Hahaha. Thank you! First approved manuscript ko po 'to so talagang nangangapa pa talaga ko. Salamat sa review! Nakakataba ng puso! :)
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome. Keep up the good work. :)
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